Wings of black flame
charred and ashen feathers
soar aloft
Darkness, Shadowy
Flaming talons
engulf—consume—devour
Birth sucks
breath
from death.
Shadows enwomb
conflict—change—flux
The eternal I
Transformation
joy—sorrow
pleasure—pain
birth—death.
Crawling, clawing, climbing
Death arisen
Beauty incarnate
Charred and scarred
wings
papery ash
Black Feathers, Flames
The Raven—Phoenix ascends.
2 comments:
Interesting, though I seem to have a problem with your use of adjectives while they are related it seems a bit too fragmented.
I could be wrong and it's just an opinion, I love fragmented stuff just seems like a lot is going on here.
Other than that there was some good assonance/alliteration. Cheers for this.
Thanks... I'm more a fiction writer than a poet... this came to me and I took a swipe at it. It's gone through several incarnations before it finally landed here.
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