Well, I always approve of humor and by now I'm sure you know that. LOL That last line is quite effective I think. I never saw it coming personally and it got a good chuckle out of me.
I beg you to reconsider the terms love hound, pole cat, and vixen. I am sure you realize that both are over used. Go for the unexpected there, my friend! Also "full moon bares twins..." don't you mean "bears" as in giving birth? Or is it different in Ireland?
Finally about those twins...there's Saturn (a good choice by the way) where's the twin? Yes, I get the logic. LOL Just pointing out that you might want to be a bit more clever with the ending.
Thanks for the fun, old fellow. I have missed this! Cheers!
Now did I say it was poor? NO. I think there's much to work with here and you did get a good laugh out of me at the end. Trust me, that's not easy to do. It's definitely not easy to surprise me in a good way. So cheers for that definitely.
Actually, what I was intending to convey is that this has some great stuff in it that deserves more of your attention. Thanks!
thanks for the comment. Yes I know you were not suggesting it was poor. I was only suggesting it :P Though it is very rough and sort of lazy on my part, but at least I can work on it now. A random sort of poem. Take it ez.
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Well, I always approve of humor and by now I'm sure you know that. LOL That last line is quite effective I think. I never saw it coming personally and it got a good chuckle out of me.
I beg you to reconsider the terms love hound, pole cat, and vixen. I am sure you realize that both are over used. Go for the unexpected there, my friend! Also "full moon bares twins..." don't you mean "bears" as in giving birth? Or is it different in Ireland?
Finally about those twins...there's Saturn (a good choice by the way) where's the twin? Yes, I get the logic. LOL Just pointing out that you might want to be a bit more clever with the ending.
Thanks for the fun, old fellow. I have missed this! Cheers!
Yes, it is very poor, just a very lazy attempt at writing. Thanks for looking though.
Now did I say it was poor? NO. I think there's much to work with here and you did get a good laugh out of me at the end. Trust me, that's not easy to do. It's definitely not easy to surprise me in a good way. So cheers for that definitely.
Actually, what I was intending to convey is that this has some great stuff in it that deserves more of your attention. Thanks!
thanks for the comment. Yes I know you were not suggesting it was poor. I was only suggesting it :P Though it is very rough and sort of lazy on my part, but at least I can work on it now. A random sort of poem. Take it ez.
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