The trees are weeping leaves
Sister Wind sweeps crisp tears away
Father Sky is weeping snow
Sister Wind whips frozen tears away
Wrapped in Winter’s frozen blanket Mother Earth slumbers
Sister Wind sings a lonely lullaby
Father Sky is weeping warmth
Sister Wind blows Winter’s icy blanket away
The trees are weeping petals
Sister Wind swirls pastel tears away
Sister Wind dances with the trees
The cycle is renewed
1 comment:
I like the opening couplet and the closing couplet very much. However, I pondered the need to personify these elements of Nature? Chances are I'm just a little bit anti humankind or perhaps overly pro nature. LOL
Still, I'd like to see this without the familial tags that also honestly seem a tad like gimmick and less like a meaningful image.
The one thing that really didn't work for me was the image of the sky weeping warmth. I don't know what that means exactly. Is it spring rain? I can only presume this. Also, earlier you say: "weeping leaves" then "weeping snow". So if you meant rain, wouldn't you have said rain?
Anyway, I do think you're on to something with this. Maybe try quatrains instead to see if you can expand the imagery a bit. Thanks. :D
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